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L.L. Ford's avatar

That was awesome! Absolutely love the way things changes in unsettling, absurdist, and surreal ways while still maintaining the foreboding and suspense!

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Thank you! 😊

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Stirling S Newberry's avatar

Good start.

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Thank you!😊

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Stirling S Newberry's avatar

I hope to see more from you!

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Thanks! I plan to start a serial on here soon.

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Ken W.'s avatar

This was really dreamy, with the fantasy and the cyberpunk atmosphere blending together. Yes, I think there's cyberpunk here with the dreary weather and the architecture. I really like it.

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Thank you! I hadn’t thought of it as cyberpunk but it’s cool when someone else sees something you didn’t notice when writing! 😎

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The Man Behind the Screen's avatar

I've read a few of the different Blackwater entries now, but this is one is special in how well you manage to capture the feeling of a nightmare in text. The way the surrealist images shuffle in ways that are both subtle and snappy builds an amazing sense of unease throughout this first part of the story.

I have to say, it's got me excited to read the second half.

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Thank you! That is a great compliment! 😊

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Bridget Riley's avatar

This was such a fun and unsettling read! I’ll have to head over to part 2 as soon as I can. Your twist on the vampire mythology worked really well in a dream setting, and I especially loved the reference to Stoker!

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Thanks Bridget!

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The Chronicler's avatar

I adore the way you've written this and the a stream of consciousness style. It's so physical and yet not? I feel like I have to read this twice in the best way. There are so many little details that I want to return to. Fantastic!

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Thank you so much! 😊

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