Small-but-Finite Probabilities
I'm so curious about how all the threads are going to converge. I'm loving the way you're lacing this story together!
If you're going to delete profanity, structure the sentences in such a way so that they make sense. Deleting it from the Titanic sentence is how it should work; "Shut the...up!" sounds stupid. (Just my opinion).
Thanks for the feedback! I’ll have a think about how to do that more effectively!
The use of old technology like writing letters to avoid surveillance is a nice touch.
I’m intrigued and excited by how the different aspects of the story are coming together, and I love the rich character interactions in this.
That thing has frustrated me ever since I read a Rudyard Kipling story that had a sentence that ended with "....and be-!" Be WHAT, exactly?
I'm so curious about how all the threads are going to converge. I'm loving the way you're lacing this story together!
If you're going to delete profanity, structure the sentences in such a way so that they make sense. Deleting it from the Titanic sentence is how it should work; "Shut the...up!" sounds stupid. (Just my opinion).
Thanks for the feedback! I’ll have a think about how to do that more effectively!
The use of old technology like writing letters to avoid surveillance is a nice touch.
I’m intrigued and excited by how the different aspects of the story are coming together, and I love the rich character interactions in this.
That thing has frustrated me ever since I read a Rudyard Kipling story that had a sentence that ended with "....and be-!" Be WHAT, exactly?