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I'm so curious about how all the threads are going to converge. I'm loving the way you're lacing this story together!

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If you're going to delete profanity, structure the sentences in such a way so that they make sense. Deleting it from the Titanic sentence is how it should work; "Shut the...up!" sounds stupid. (Just my opinion).

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Thanks for the feedback! I’ll have a think about how to do that more effectively!

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The use of old technology like writing letters to avoid surveillance is a nice touch.

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I’m intrigued and excited by how the different aspects of the story are coming together, and I love the rich character interactions in this.

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That thing has frustrated me ever since I read a Rudyard Kipling story that had a sentence that ended with "....and be-!" Be WHAT, exactly?

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